||[Jan. 1st, 2011|11:54 am]
Here is my current work in progress of page 3. Let me know if this reads better, the guys in the foreground on the bottom panel are the aliens.|
I think that does read better! It feels like the explosion got significantly smaller in the redraw, though, and that seems to run a little counter to the 'impressive' value of the 'index cards'.
You might try pulling the camera back and up just a little more, giving the explosion more of the frame and making the aliens smaller at the bottom of it.
Thanks for the feedback, and good crits! I'll fix'r up in no time!
Cool! I had to go see the first version you did cause I missed it.
A couple of suggestions though. First panel, why not have the rocket overlap into panel 2?
You could also add in a panel of what the guy is aiming at in between panels 1 and 2.
Panel 3, maybe add some motion blur here, so the panel doesn't look so still. Last panel is pretty cool, but remember to include the rocket launcher :)
Thanks man, good points. I'll work on it and post my updates soon. Stay cool DF.
needs speedlines, baby! :D Or not, depending on the kinda style you're goin for, which I'm thinking not? ;D
Speedlines, I put those in my comics for lunch!
Thanks, we'll see how it looks =P
2011-04-02 10:00 pm (UTC)
1991 acura integra pictures